http://jezziejay.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] jezziejay.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] flywoman 2012-10-05 08:37 pm (UTC)

Oh, I could really feel that tumble Puyi took - you write those details so well. Made me shudder! I love how you crafted the effect it had on both the team and the individual players. Alexis' back story was factored in beautifully, and very naturally, and I can see Xavi stepping up for him, until poor Puyi gets better, and maybe even after.

Loved this line - Alexis sniffed loudly and didn't reply, but his arm snaked around Xavi's waist and stayed there, warm and solid, lending the midfielder support that he hadn't even known he needed. Lovely. ♥

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